Besoin d'aide pour corriger texte en anglais!

[sengirs]

bonjour, j'ai redigé ce texte en anglais mais j'ai comme d'habitude dû faire quelques erreurs. Si quelqu'un est capable de m'aider, je le remercie d'avance.
Sengirs

dear uncle,
I write to you to have share of my projects concerning
my future... 4 days ago, I received my first wages. You cannot imagine
my pride! but that also made me become aware of the hard reality of
the life. I hope not to exert the trade of deliveryman too a long time
because I very badly support the attitude of certain people towards
me. Indeed, the majority of people, in more of being skinflints,
behave in a hateful way in front of me. I think soon of leaving
Ireland in order to settle in the United States, with an aim of
finding an employment more interesting and perhaps a better life... I
would like to become bank clerk but I do not know if I of it would be
able. If that is possible, could I live a few days at home time that I
find a job? But if that is not possible, I would find another
solution. Do not worry you! In any event, it is necessary that I
remain in Ireland a few months in order to gain enough money for the
travel. I already started to save! That made 3 months that I think of
it. And it is true that America makes me dream! I read in many
magazines which the landscapes are splendid there and which the
population is prosperous. I am so much exity with the idea to leave my
native land. I await impatiently your answer. I hope that you and mary
are well. Goodbye!

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Quand on emploie "ago" c'est pas en fin de phrase ?

[Popo]

the landscapes are splendid there ce n'est pas plutot here

[Bananedu78]

Il me semble aussi :s