Verification D'un Texte Anglais

[meme3001]

Pouvez vous vérifier si mes phrases ont du sens et si elles sont correctes? Merci

Summary

The Journal of the American Medical Association, following a study called "the women's Healthy Eating and Living” (WHEL) shows that the risk of recurrence of breast cancer does not appear despite the reduced consumption of fruit and vegetables.
The WHEL study was conducted on two groups of women but the results are considered questionable by Dr. Susan Gapstur and Dr. Seema Khan following reports autonomous.
However, two other recent studies confirm that certain foods can increase the risk of cancer.
The Asian women, who have adopted more Western-style diets, have about twice the risk of breast cancer.
Another study shows that women who ate a quarter of a grapefruit or more a day are up to 30% more likely to develop breast cancer.
The diet is a component of the prevention of breast cancer, but the overall energy balance plays a role in the recurrence of this cancer.
The diet is a factor in the prevention of breast cancer, but the overall energy balance plays a role in the recurrence of this cancer.
Researchers at the University of California in San Diego are studying the effect of exercise and weight loss on cancer prevention.
In conclusion, the key to fighting breast cancer would be to have a balanced life and to have good health.

Personal opinion

The study done on diet surprised because it does not reduce the risk of breast cancer.
The study made with the two groups of women was also surprising because previously, it was believed that fruit and vegetables could prevent this disease, but no!
What is incredible, it is the analysis of the negative effect of grapefruit!
Who would have imagined that these fruits grow up to 30% risk of breast cancer?
Right now, I remove it from my diet!
The study on Asian women surprises me too, and I think that adapt to the Asian food would be a good thing to reduce the risk of this cancer!
The study on weight loss and exercise that will be developed is very interesting. But it would be good if the results are fast because it promotes physical activity and a slim while it may harm our health!

[T60]

C'est pas mal mais il y a quand meme quelques phrases a ameliorer je dirais:

"to have a balanced life and good health" tu ne vx pas plutot dire "a balanced lifestyle and a good health"?

"The study surprised ME" c'est ton opinion a toi apres tout ;)

", but no!" ah on ne px pas traduire cmt ca, pas ds une phrase: dis plutot "but it does not"


sinon c pas mal...

[Alex83]

Bonsoir,

Je crois meme3001 que tu t'es trompé d'endroit car ce n'est pas des maths... Il existe une partie langues étrangères sur ce site.