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Posted by: ptitemimidu18

Bonjour , je dois rédiger une biographie sur Ray Bradbury , je l'ai faite et j'aimeriez que vous me disez où j'ai fait des fautes ou où je dois améliorer des poassages :

One of his ancestor Mary Bradbury was sentenced for about a witch 1680 for her ideas not very orthodoxes and he conserved that mind sceptic .

He was born in Wankegan , little town in the bigmeadows on the lac of Michigan , in the worth of Chicago . He discovered the fairy dails at the age of 5 , the kingdown of Oz at six , the revue "Amazing Stories" at 8 . Then the stories of Edgar Rice Burroiughs , Blockshow , the magicien and Lon Chaney the gargoyle . Jules Vernes and the serials on the radio . It was the tile , when like Nobohov in Russia before the revolution , or like Orson Welles (born in Kenosha , a few kilometers from Wankigon , just on the other side of the border with the Winsconsin) .

He accumulates in the loft of his memory , amongst the spinning top , the kite and the broken toys , all his fantastik writing which changed him .

Wankegan was for Bardbury the same which was Hannibal (Missouri) was for Mark Twaini a place for the fall in depressium .

In 1992 , his father loasted his job at the phone compagny where he placed the wire , and the whole family left for the Quest . Tusacan (Arizona) and Los Angeles. Ray Bradbury was forteen , when he arrived the fantastic city , it was like a mirage on the border of the Pacific . The next day of his arrival he asked the vowner of the Kiosque , at the corner of Pico and western , wherewas situated the studio Metro Goldweyn Moyer "Binoclard" affairned of readers , he had a youth of a real fan . He collected onto groghs of the shars , and even drove in their limonins with them . When he finished his studies in 1938 , he mades a living with selling news-papers , and started reading at the same same time .He was influenced by Poe , ... , he signed his works on the pen name of Ron , writted fantastic and terrible stories , there were always a taste of horreur . He didn't find any publisher and founded with the help of his friends forrest J acher mann , colled in Los angeles .

He had learned short sentences , the Rody writer like Welty .. the way to write tropisme of a conscience which is waken up slowly like a paper flower in a japanese paper , with the sensation of another world .

Merci de m'aider


Posted by: RouJ

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Posté par ptitemimidu18
One of his ancestor, Mary Bradbury, was sentenced in 1680 for her ideas not very orthodox and he conserved that mind scepticism.

He was born in Wankegan, a little town in the bigmeadows? on the lac of Michigan, in the north of Chicago. Not only did he discovered the fairy dails? enchanting tales ? at the age of five, the kingdown of Oz at six , the revue "Amazing Stories" at eight and then the stories of Edgar Rice Burroiughs, Blockshow the magician and Lon Chaney the gargoyle, but also Jules Vernes and the radio programmes.



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It was the tile, when like Nobohov in Russia before the revolution, or like Orson Welles (born in Kenosha, a few kilometers from Wankigon, just on the other side of the border with the Winsconsin) .


Je ne comprends pas cette phrase...

Sinon pour le reste il y a encore des fautes, mais cite ses oeuvres. Bradbury c'est quand même Fahrenheit 451 entre autres et de la pure Science Fiction !

PS: tu es en HS pour la la Litterature/Philosophie par contre...


Posted by: ptitemimidu18

bonjour , merci pour ton aide , en fait je voulais dire :


Une de ses ancêtres, Mary Bradbury, fut condamnée comme sorcière à Salem vers 1680 pour ses idées non-orthodoxes et il a conservé cet esprit sceptique.
Il est né à Waukegan, petite ville de la grande Prairie, sur les bords du lac Michigan, au nord de Chicago. Il a découvert les contes de fées à cinq ans, le royaume d'Oz à six, la revue “Amazing Stories” à huit. Ensuite, ce furent les récits d'Edgar Rice Burroughs, Blackstone le magicien et Lon Chaney la gargouille, Jules Verne et les feuilletons à la radio.C'était l'époque où, un peu comme Nabokov dans la Russie d'avant la Révolution, ou encore comme Orson Welles (né à Kenosha, à quelques kilomètres de Waukegan, juste de l'autre côté de la frontière du Wisconsin).

donc je l'ai traduit moi même à partir d'un résumé en français que j'avais fait mais je sais pas si c'est juste ?










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